Homework 4?5?

 
For this assignment I read the second proposal that was posted and I actually found it very interesting. I had not known how much a class was so it was a rather eye-opening essay/proposal for me to read. When reading I found many many points that I agreed with and by the end of the proposal I was sold. I thought it was a well-made argument which had many details and facts but was not too overwhelming with knowledge. Also, the argument was on a topic that could have gone many different ways, but the writer took a good stance and stayed with it throughout the paper, which I enjoyed.

One thing I did notice that might be able to strengthen the writer’s paper were some grammatical errors. Other than that I found the argument to be precise, to the point, and well written. Sometimes though, I wish there had been a little more defining, when the writer was talking about all of the classes and the bulk of the argument I found repetition and some circling happening. Although I do not think it took away from the overall paper it was just something I thought of.

I did not find a 'resistant' audience that was being addressed in the argument. But, the writer did address all of the possible objections to their plan throughout their piece. If any objections were to come about I believe it would be from those who read this that are members of the SRC but are not students. This might be the resistant audience and I believe that this would be so for many reasons. One being that the proposal is for students only and there would not be any benefits for those in the community who are members. This could be looked at as not fair and I think this might be an area the writer might also want to review and see if there are any options for those in this group to make a deal that is beneficial for all.

I would rate the writer’s ethos a hard 8 put of 10 this is because it was above average, but it might not be applicable to everyone. If someone who was not a student was to read this and they were a member of the SRC they might not like that they would not be getting the same benefits that were being proposed for the students. But other than that, it was solid through the argument and the writer’s use of ethos was appropriate as well as needed in some aspects.

I do believe that this is a good model for our assignment because it cover the material, as well as was professional and I believe that it could be an actually proposal that should be considered.